characters i made + potential cartoon

I made these guys a bit back and wrote up a concept of a cartoon I might make. I still haven't figured out all the characters I wanted to make but it's about these 2 high school juniors who work at a chicken restaurant called "The Chicken Wing". One is depressed, and the other one tries to keep his mood up. I've formulated some other characters but they aren't as final.

Second image is a bit of a redesign from the first one, but anyways, should probably talk about some of the characters.

George Parte - 17 years old, down to earth and depressed. Often realistic and grounded. Tries to be nice and reserved around others but bottles his emotions up usually. He's pretty socially awkward. He comes from an Italian background and he has a tall, lanky figure. He is best friends with Jack, or "Jackson", despite their differing personalities.

Jack "Jackson" Fergson - Also 17, and is Jack's best friend. He is a lot more upbeat, and tries to cheer George up. He is similar to a comic relief, but can become more serious in certain situations. He also has childish tendencies, having a pet rock who he often brings to work. He's also the one usually getting the duo into certain situations.

Mr. O'Wingly - The owner of the Chicken Wing. He disapproves of George and Jackson's antics, but doesn't want to fire them as he views them as good workers. He is some-what no-nonsense, and views his business as important, but he also legitimately cares about George and Jackson.

Giovanni Parte - George's grandfather, who immigrated from Italy when he was only 10. He's now 92. He often doesn't have any filters and says and does a lot of unhinged things. He still somewhat speaks with a slight Italian accent despite being in America for over 80 years. 

I imagine this show touching upon certain political situations, but it's not going to be as mature as South Park, I'm thinking more PG or PG-13. I have certain other ideas for characters, like for some of their teachers, an unserious principal and a stern vice principal, other students, and maybe even love interests, but I'm not exactly set on how I should write the characters.

Anyways, let me know what y'all think and if I should continue with it. I created the main 2 characters and came up with the concept, about a year ago now if memory serves me right. Other suggestions are also welcome.

i mean idk why not. if i can be blunt ur art isn't the best like sorry but if ur serious about this u gotta know? i think if the writing is good enough you can get it off the ground but it might be difficult. in fact it's gonna be difficult to get this off the ground even if you have the best writing and animation ever. like idk why not go with it, if ur just gonna post it online? like what's stopping you there's no consequences

hallo steve , i have read it happily and want to say.. the character “george” strikes my interest, i like his simplistic but weirdly cute design . the posing on the two of them very much shows the personalities perfectly , the style is reminding me of the early adult swim shows . in a way.. and i do love those. i imagine the animation to look “choppy” but in a endearing way, much like adult cartoons like squid billies for small example . i would love to see the idea flourish into something fun (´• ω •`)

I think you should try to make a short animation, a storyboard or maybe a comic with them..I like how the characters are written, they have a lot of potential to have their own characters analyzed, which is what makes them interesting))

Just like how mrsurrealist says...I imagine the animation to look choppy, it's not exactly a bad thing, I find choppy animations with simpler artstyles very charming. 

I love how you don't want Jackson to just be that one comic relief and that's it, since he is capable of being serious. It's a huge problem with a lot of other writings, where a character just ends up becoming exxagareted version of themselves, I think you should be careful with that anyway..

I do wonder if you have any voice claims for the characters or not? 

Ooh Nice! Ir reminds me of newgrounds or something on adult swim, like aqua teen hunger force (im aware of some shows that aired before I was born lolol ;3)

these fellas are sick as hell, big fan of the shapey style style of them :-) may just be me but they remind me of seth and evan from superbad 

This is so cool. I really like their character designs 

I tried my best, idk if it’s good but I hope you like it