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i think i'm absolutely in love with your writing style and the way you convey emotions. i felt a huge discomfort reading this. from what i understood, this poem deconstructs that orthodox/religious image of sheeps being entirely "pure and innocent" and puts into perspective sheeps as sinners, maybe in a even worse condition than wolves [that are hunting because they have hunger]. that's the analysis on a surface level tho. the most interesting part to me is how you portrayed the violence. how the friends - the flock of sheep - ostracized her [from what i can see, they bullied her] and, ultimately, killed her emotionally. actually, maybe that even led to her demise...? that would give the narrator's suffering an even more powerful guilt. the sin that is, also, slowly killing the guilty sheep. i truly hope i got most of it right [and sorry if i,, mistook everything, LOL]!! and again, i'm absolutely in love with your writing. thank you for blessing the today's blog section with such a beautiful poem!!! |
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hello! thank you so much for the kind words. I'm very glad you enjoyed reading and feeling emotion for my poem! And yes you are quite correct! I wanted to subvert the idea of sheeps symbolising innocence when they can also be expressed as subjects of compliance, bullying, and groups that sin and are peer pressured to sin. In some way, they can be more crueler than wolves, who naturally hunt for their predatory instinct. and compare that to the sheep's behaviour which instead actively acts and are totally aware of what they're doing. And I think that highlights how depraved a person's soul can get.
And yes you are correct, there's guilt in the memory of grouping up and bullying someone. There is suffering in knowing that you've done wrong. In some way I like to imagine that the victim was hunted by predatory sheeps, and she was a poor victim to their harassment resulting in isolation.
I also wanted to layer religious symbolism to create the idea that the person looks for forgiveness in God. So they view their own past actions as "sins" that ought to be corrected. Unintentionally, I can also see a connection in how God is perceived to be a shepherd that guide's the sheeps and the many stories of humans sinning and rejecting God's guidance.
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and hope you have a wonderful day/night! may your pillows be cold!
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i'm really impressed by how many layers you managed to convey here [and how there's such a depth in significance], omg!! this only shows how fascinating you writing is,, and i am... in complete awe? LOLOL
speaking more seriously, i truly loved how you portrait suffering and the human soul in such a beautiful manner. there aren't many people sharing their works here on FriendRewind, so i feel like it's such a blessing whenever i see something so beautiful like this. please, please please never stop posting twin!! i've also subscribed to your blogs, too :]]
by ian.ian; ; Report