Im writing a coming of age vampire book with a horrible twist, to get her fangs she needs to go on a kind of rumspringa and kill the person she cares about most after shes experienced the world. But im kind of questioning it.
I want this book to kind of go against most vampire literature we read where they end up the good guys in the end, i want my main character to seem like shes getting better, and then ruin it all in the end. But i worry that would make it bad and no one would want to read it lol. Basically she leaves her castle for the first time and is given a guide, who ends up being the person she cares about most bc shes had no other friends (on purpose, its tradition but no one can tell her) and during the trip she slowly meets more ppl that she becomes friends with. shes working on herself as a person, and is trying to figure out how to get her fangs on this trip, all while becoming more and more bloodthirsty. I just dont know how to have the same effect without making her irredeemable. i was thinking maybe she turns them into vampires and continues the cycle, but i feel thats to cliche. lmk yalls thoughts!
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Maybe after getting her fangs, her original guide betrays her somehow and she’s forced to revert back to her old instincts and kill them in the end. Her new friends can’t look at her the same anymore,Then she voluntarily goes back to her castle or voluntarily steps into the sunrise.
ACEspinZ
ok so you're liking the way the story is going and the idea of it but you dont want it to follow the standard vampire books. if you want them to go down a bad path but not necessarily like continuing the cycle by turning them into vampires just a suggestion but you could have her realise what they're going to make her do she could refuse it and maybe get exiled and you can make them go through some negative development from the exile?